Yeah I think its really good. Lots of detail and info on what each individual achieved.

2long but by the looks….. its looks good..lol

I like how you impacted it towards europe, etc. good job.

Very good - but I must agree with Brown.
As this is your conclusion, I assume you have this information elsewhere in your paper.
Try to cut it down a little.
Good Luck!!

In all honesty, this will likely earn you a 'D' if you're lucky. Please take this to your English teacher and ask for assistance with your sentence structure and grammar. For example, names do not ricochet, they resonate. An achilles heel is a singular, devastating shortcoming. It would be illogical to attribute more than one to a person.

As for content, don't lose sight of the fact that both men's greatest achievements were unintentional. Luther's intent was to reform the existing Catholic Church. He did not wish to spearhead the creation of Protestant sects. Magellan did not intend to circumnavigate the globe. Not accounting for the existence of the Pacific Ocean, he thought he could reach the Moluccas by sailing to the east from the west (by way of a strait through the middle of South America which he found did not exist) and more quickly than the traditional eastern route. Though Magellan did not survive the journey, some of his crew did and became the first men to circumnavigate the globe, though unintentionally.
As for impact, Luther's was immediate. Reformation swept across Europe. The translation of the Bible into the vernacular had a tremendous impact on the success of the Reformation and Luther's german translation and introductions of the New Testament books were widely used as the basis for other translations. Magellan suffered a shameful death, and remained unheralded until many years after his death. It was decades before another person (Drake) would successfully circumnavigate the globe. Magellan's personal goal was to achieve fame and fortune for himself and his family. He utterly failed. Luther's desire was to reform the church and re-establish the primacy of doctrine of justification through faith rather than works. He failed to immediately reform the Catholic Church, but he succeeded in re-establishing the central message of the New Testament.